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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Socializing among
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, in
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 contemporary era, is being affected by discoveries in
technology
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. Does the argument that it is making
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 more reclusive hold any logic? Considering not only the reduced distance between
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 but
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 the availability of effective features to communicate along with the benefits to professionals, I find the above argument to be flawed. Modern gadgets have enabled
people
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 to contact their acquaintances living in far-flung areas.
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 is because of the inventions of not only real-time messaging but
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 live video chats that
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 now are in touch with their relatives and friends while enjoying the comfort of their homes. Had
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 discoveries not been made, they would have to either take leaves from their hectic schedules to maintain their bonds or the relations would have weakened.
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, the benefits of
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 are not limited to increasing the range of communication. Communication has
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 been made more effective by
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. with the help of emoticons and by changing the format of a text,
people
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, nowadays, can convey their message in a clearer manner, Which was not possible in previous times when the only plain text was sent through letters.
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, one can bold or underline a part of the text on which the reader's more attention is required. Even the language barriers have been disappeared because of a translator. Along with the above merits on a personal level,
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 can
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 communicate well professionally. Both more opportunities of conversation in terms of conducting training or interviews over new applications,
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 as skype, and new methods of passing information, like sending audio-visual files along with electronic mails, are present now.
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, it has improved the level of formal contact, too. In conclusion, better communication among folk’s personal and professional lives has been made possible by modern gizmos;
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, I am strongly convinced that socialization in modern civilization has not been adversely affected due to inventions in
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