Government in many countries have recently introduce special taxes on food and beverages which is highly of sugar . some think that this taxes are good idea , but other are disagree on this view .

Sugar is essential parts of our daily routine
diet
while
,
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it should be consumed in nominal amount because of detrimental effects on
health
. In some
Nation
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,Nation

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extra charges are imposed on highly contain glucose product
such
as beverage and chocolates to reduce
the
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consumption, which is not agreed
by
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upon by

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one part of the society.
However
,
regulatory
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the regulatory

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authority should keep all the factors related to public
health
in his mind, and organize awareness program of
healthy
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a healthy

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diet
and high tariff consequences on civilization.
To begin
with, healthy
diet
awareness camp, youngsters are easily distracting towards energy drinks, which are result
into
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in

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obesity and hypertension.
Moreover
, they regularly consuming
such
nutrition due to
lack
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a lack

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of knowledge. Owing to
this
, local authority organizes knowledge expending program in school and
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college

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collage
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college

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to change
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the mind

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mind set
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mindset

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.
Furthermore
, study subjects of vigorous
diet
should be part of primary and high education syllabus to enlarge proficiency.
In addition
, with the development of society not only fitness level will improve but
also
nation economy will strong.
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, including toll on regular food items would have
negative
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a negative

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impact on
community
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the community

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. Hike on price would
serious
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seriously

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impact for among and individual.
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, in
India
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most of the family have
limited
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a limited

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source of income, who is fulfilling
everyone is
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everyone's

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requirement
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a requirement

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. He will not able to do
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daily
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bread requirement of his family.
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,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing

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company will
also
lose their business due to lack of consumption, and people will
also
loss
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their job in
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a private

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company. It has
also
detrimental
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a detrimental

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impact on
country
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the country

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economy. In conclusion, council power has responsibilities to take the
health
of peoples by taking several
step
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steps

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like skill enhancement programs and by education system improvement.
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,
individual
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an individual
the individual

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also
the equal responsibilities
of
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for

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his
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their

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health
by proper food routine chart follow-up. charging extra toll is not
a
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the

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right solution in order to
healthy
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a healthy

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society.
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