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Government in many countries have recently introduce special taxes on food and beverages which is highly of sugar . some think that this taxes are good idea , but other are disagree on this view .

#government #countries #taxes #food #beverages #sugar #think #idea
Sugar is essential parts of our daily routine
diet
 while
,
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it should be consumed in nominal amount because of detrimental effects on
health
. In some
Nation
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 extra charges are imposed on highly contain glucose product
such
 as beverage and chocolates to reduce
the
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consumption, which is not agreed
by
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 one part of the society.
However
,
regulatory
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 authority should keep all the factors related to public
health
 in his mind, and organize awareness program of
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
 and high tariff consequences on civilization.
To begin
 with, healthy
diet
 awareness camp, youngsters are easily distracting towards energy drinks, which are result
into
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in
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 obesity and hypertension.
Moreover
, they regularly consuming
such
 nutrition due to
lack
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 of knowledge. Owing to
this
, local authority organizes knowledge expending program in school and
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collage
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college
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 to change
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the mind
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mind set
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mindset
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.
Furthermore
, study subjects of vigorous
diet
 should be part of primary and high education syllabus to enlarge proficiency.
In addition
, with the development of society not only fitness level will improve but
also
 nation economy will strong.
On the other hand
, including toll on regular food items would have
negative
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 impact on
community
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. Hike on price would
serious
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 impact for among and individual.
For example
, in
India
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 most of the family have
limited
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a limited
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 source of income, who is fulfilling
everyone is
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everyone's
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requirement
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a requirement
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. He will not able to do
fulfill
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daily
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the daily
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 bread requirement of his family.
In addition
,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 company will
also
 lose their business due to lack of consumption, and people will
also
loss
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 their job in
private
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a private
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 company. It has
also
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 impact on
country
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the country
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 economy. In conclusion, council power has responsibilities to take the
health
 of peoples by taking several
step
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 like skill enhancement programs and by education system improvement.
However
,
individual
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an individual
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also
 the equal responsibilities
of
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for
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his
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health
 by proper food routine chart follow-up. charging extra toll is not
a
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 right solution in order to
healthy
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a healthy
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 society.
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