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Some people prefer to live with a roommate.Others prefer to live alone.Compare the advantage of each choice.Which of these two options do you prefer? use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Choosing to share our accommodation with someone is a matter of choice.There is a school of thought that believes there are many perks of sharing their rooms with a roommate.Whereas, others prefer to live alone for some obvious reasons.
However
,being an extrovert person, I firmly believe in living in a shared room and the advantages of doing so clearly outweigh the advantages of its counterpart.
This
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a conclusion. There are some significant benefits of living in a shared apartment.
First
 of all,it helps habitants to reduce the burden of heavy monthly rents.Which in turn,makes living more affordable in
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 where rents are most expensive.
This
 is the prime reason why most
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international students prefer sharing their place of living.
Secondly
,living under the same roof implies dividing household chores between innates,which saves a substantial amount of time.
For example
,if one is cooking the food,the other washes the dishes.
This
 gives both parties some extra leisure time to spare.
Last
 but not least,it has been commonly witnessed that roommates eventually become best friends for life;which
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 believe is a true beauty of sharing a room with someone.
On the other hand
,some
people
 prefer to live alone because of their extroverted nature.
For instance
,if two roommates cannot communicate with each other effectively
then
 the entire experience of sharing a living space gets into turmoil.
That is
 the reason why
such
people
 do not like to live in a shared space.Apart from that,some extremely dedicated and focused
people
 do not want anyone to disturb them while they work at home.While living alone the productivity of
such
people
 almost gets doubled . To conclude,upholding my opinion,I sharing on accommodation with right attitude clearly surmounts the benefits of living alone because by living alone one does not only have to dig dip in the pocket but there are
also
 fair chances of inviting anxiety and depression.
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