Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some may argue that after kids start attending school, they tend to be more influenced by their instructors than by their parents. In fact,
this
is a debatable statement. In order to construct our argumentation, initially
we must recognise that young people will be influenced by different elements Add a comma
,initially
besides
teachers, and parents. And because of that
we defend the position that distinct factors collaborate Add a comma
,that
to
the development of a Change preposition
with
child
.
The first
and more important social contact that a small kid will have is with their progenitors, even outer of the scholar space. Likewise
, fathers and mothers play an
fundamental role in education, becoming Change the article
a
one
of their child
's idols or heroes. Furthermore
, other colleagues, either the ones who live in the same neighbourhood, or who go to the same academic environment, tend to contribute with one
's personality. For example
, even during the primary infant ages, it is known that part of our societal
life is Replace the word
social
immitating
our peers in order to take part Correct your spelling
imitating
of
the group. We want to feel equal to those Change preposition
in
who
we admire.
Change the pronoun
whom
Similarly
, coordinators may
Correct your spelling
maybe
be become
Change to the active voice
become
have become
one
relevant Correct pronoun usage
apply
models
to children, but they are not the uniques. Change to a singular noun
model
In addition
to them, there are books, other colleagues, actors and actress of TV
show. As a matter of fact, it is the combination of those aspects that will shape a human personality. Add an article
the TV
a TV
For instance
, if a child
loves a particular cartoon, and feels completely identified with the story, she will probably dress,
and talk like her favourite character. The whole idea of being influenced by only Remove the comma
apply
one
person is absolutely impossible.
To conclude, although
people may argue that after the beginning of the school life, a child
will acquire some traits from his teachers, it is believed that they is
just Change the verb form
are
one
that will participate in the development along with parents, and other children. Because of that, all those participants must behaviour
in an inspiring way, so that the small ones can pursue the best version of their own.Replace the word
behave
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