Some people think that strict punishments for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The issue of whether the government strict punishments for wrong driving is sufficient or if other methods
such
as trained driving , awareness
programs
and better infrastructure are more important for safety has been raising a lot of debates.
To begin
with,just by the government penalizing the misbehaved drivers will not be simply
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sufficient
.After an accident where the victim is injured or killed ,fining and jailing the driver is just an after-step of the consequences.Though
this
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hard learning to the motorist ,he will be more cautious with his consecutive travels ,but
this
does not help the victim in anyways as he is already bleeding or has
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his life.A proactive measure needs to be in place
such
that it reduces
such
incidents before happening.
Firstly
, the training program needs to evaluate at theoretical and practical aspects of the person that if provided the license they will use it with better social responsibility.He/She needs to be examined if he is aware of the traffic rules of the country and understand various factors like board sign , speed limits , states culture and the consequences if he/she does not follow those.
Secondly
, proper awareness
programs
need to be set occasionally and have them invited
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so that they are aware of any changes in the laws.
Additionally
, these
programs
can be used to show reports of trends in accidents in the city which will increase
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people's awareness.
For example
, a report showing the trend of major and minor accidents in the cities can be as a precaution and people will drive with care.
Finally
,having cameras in cities and highways can help to identify misbehaved drivers who try to use electronic devices while computing or even
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drunken
drive and rash driving can be stoped by the cops anytime and get them off the roads to avoid accidents. In conclusion,strict punishments do help in keeping the roads safe but
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that
the final step that should be taken
in addition
to having proper license issuing ,
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awareness
programs
and monitoring of the vehicle movements which are more important and primarily help to avoid incidents
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