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Songs with violent lyrics make people more violent and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree

#songs #lyrics #people
It goes without saying that the issue of combination aggressive behaviour with music is a very crucial one concerning a considerable number of people. From where I stand I am a strong opponent of
this
 view for the following reasons.
First
 and foremost, the main reason why I support the above-stated view is that all are equal against the law in democratic countries so we can speak out against
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the lyrics of everyone song. What I'm trying to say is that
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banning any kind of music may be as well be connected with future hunting other humans' rights
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 as freedom of speech. A striking example is the recent arrest of Turkish students inside the university because they played music criticizing the President. What is more, a
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