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Given statistics displays the aggregation of the number of minutes of telephone calls, spent on three different types of calls made from 1995 to 2002 in the United Kingdom. Overall, local calls remained more popular throughout the tenure, whereas national and international calls and mobile call were
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second
 and
third
 position respectively.
However
 national and internal calls and mobile calls both increased over the period,
thus
 reducing the gap between all three categories in 2002. Minutes spent on local calls fluctuated over the time period, with just over 70
billion
 in 1995, to
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 90
billion
 in 1999
then
 declining to just over 70
billion
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 of the 21st Century. National and international calls and mobile calls popularity increased every year. National and international calls increased gradually from just below 40
billion
 in 1995 to over 60
billion
 in 2002. Mobile calls
also
 increased gradually in the start from approximately 3
billion
 to just over 12
billion
 but increased dramatically from the start of
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 Century. Mobile phone calls almost doubled from roughly 25
billion
 in 2000 to just over 45
billion
 in 2002.
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