Global environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations Do you agree with this opinion?

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Nowadays,
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in the climates is the biggest issue in many
nations
. It is said that only wealthy
nations
are responsible for global climate problems. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
statement. Since
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every
nations
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equally responsible for
this
and mutually deal with
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issues. To begin with, there are various reasons
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this
why wealthy
countries
accounted
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this
phenomenon.
Firstly
, Industrialization in developed
nations
first
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could bring some conflict impact on our ecosystem.
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,
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huge amount of carbon dioxide has been discharged by many industries which are leading to air pollution in
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atmosphere.
Secondly
, Maximum utilization of natural resources is allowed
nations
to become richer and more developed.
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, they should take
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ahead in
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to
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environmental protection with their advanced technologies. On the other hand, while numerous
countries
with their wealth are trying to cope with
this
situation, green shelter is harming by the developing
countries
should be neglected.
Additionally
, developing
nations
mean getting more economically developed these days than rich
nations
doing in past and the large proportion of inhabitants are there, there for the pollution level has remarkable increase as well.
Lastly
, there is a lack of public awareness
towards
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environmental preservation in some poor
nations
. Deforestation and overexploitation of their economical activities leading to negative effects on the natural world.
For example
, developed
countries
take action towards their industrialization emissions while some
nations
are
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free and
harm
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to nature. In conclusion, it can be said that both are liable to
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leading
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global environmental phenomenon and take steps towards utilization of natural resources.
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