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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Recently, the debate on whether giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce
crime
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 has been heated. As far as I am concerned, providing more
education
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 should be a better way to prevent
crime
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. In
this
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 essay, I will outline both sides and elaborate on them.
To begin
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 with, lengthen prison time will increase the
cost
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 of
crime
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, the deterrent effect may help lower the rate of
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.
For example
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, China has announced that the minimum
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 for stealing has been changed from several days to several weeks.
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, people have a higher chance to think twice to see if the
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 will outweigh the benefit that can bring to them by conducting the
crime
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.
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,
education
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 can expose the general public to moral judgement and know what is wrong in the long term. To explain
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, many criminals feel regret after being caught and say they do not know what they do is forbidden.
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, Hong Kong has posted many notices on the train and the street to let people know the seriousness of smoking in public area and stealing in order to solve the
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 caused by ignorant. Considering Hong Kong as one of the safest city in the world, the effect of
education
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 can be well illustrated. To conclude, giving a longer prison period can only bar people from some bad that have lower
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, while
education
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 tends to solve the root of the problem.
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, it can be concluded methods like noticing should be more efficient in the long term in safeguarding a city's security.
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