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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more prons to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Although
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 some believe that living in an apartment has more advantages, others give priority to living in a
house
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. I think that,
while
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 staying in a large accommodation can offer more space where people can use it, the cost of those houses is expensive. There are several basic benefits to having a large
house
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,
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 as spacious areas. Individuals may use them to have more rooms so everybody can have privacy
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 to storing their
items
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 in the same rooms.
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, people can ask their relatives and friends to visit them, which is a great idea to eat healthy food
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 cooked at home.
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, members of society in Saudi Arabia usually have an enormous
house
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.
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, citizens tend to visit each other at their houses. Despite all of those advantages, having a large accommodation costs a lot, starting from the price
for
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 purchasing the unit through the decorations and ending with paying the bills. Living in a large area means spending more, because using more utilities and needing to fill the area with
items
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, so some prefer to spend on other
items
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 rather than on where they live.
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, the members of the public who like
traveling
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travelling
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 usually live in flats because they want to save their income for
traveling
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. In conclusion, a big
house
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 can offer more rooms, which means more privacy for humans to live and store
items
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, and allows guests to visit, but they need to allocate an additional budget for extra facilities and services. I recommend that males and females prioritise their budget.

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Try to include a wider variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and ideas.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines both points of view (living in a house vs. apartment) and sums up your position for clarity.
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Include more specific examples or case studies to strengthen your points and make your argument more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is essential for good organization.
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Good job providing a relevant example about Saudi Arabia that supports your point about the advantages of having a large house.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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