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In the ultra-modern epoch, it is a point of debate that
criminals
 should be educated in prisons or not. Undoubtedly,
this
 notion remains successful in keeping a majority in its favour.
Also
, I am in accord with the statement that academic and carrier training should be provided to prisoners. The subsequent paragraphs would elucidate my arguments related to the very conception.
Initially
, literacy is a powerful tool for reducing the
crime
 rate in any society,
therefore
, if more
criminals
 will be trained or educated
then
 it will be more chance for less
crime
.
Secondly
 , carrier classes for small level
criminals
 like snatchers will lead to making them independent and they do not need to thieve or snatch.
Moreover
, if the government will teach them about laws and norms that will
also
 help to decrease offence in the world.
For instance
 , if people know that if they will commit a
crime
then
 definitely they have to face prison or death plenty for that
crime
 ,for
this
 fear maybe they will think twice before committing a
crime
.
Furthermore
, offenders can get a
second
 chance to prove themselves as decent society member after getting good training during their prison time. Contrarily, despite some various ,factors there are myriad things that are against the criminal’s education. Most prominent is , if the prisoner did a
crime
 like murder or rape
then
 he will not allow living the rest of his life outside of prison and he or she has no right to get education or carrier counselings. To recapitulate,
although
 I agree that everyone should be allowed to get academic knowledge even
criminals
 to lawbreakers who did a big
crime
 should not be allowed to get any type of training
otherwise
 , it will be unfair to victims or their family members.
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