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Some people think that the fittest and strongest individuals of the team can achieve success in sports, while others believe that success depends on mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that the successful career of
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sportsmen
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is depended
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 on
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physical strength
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 as muscles,
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body
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and body
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. Others think
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that success depends on a mental
attitude
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.
This
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views in forthcoming paragraphs and I personally believe that a mental
attitude
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 is most important to achieve triumph.
To begin
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 with, Some believe that one can win a game by his physical strength. They take the fittest
body
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 key to success.
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, In wrestling, If a
player
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 is physically strong he can win the medals. A person who is strong can overcome all the problems.
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, others
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I included, believe that mental
attitude
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 is most important to earn
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more medals. A person with a strong
body
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 and without a mental
attitude
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 cannot do anything in the playground. Mind training and mental
attitude
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 are ahead to achieve the goal.
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,
last
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player
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 Sania Nehwal. In which she
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 mentioned that she plays with a mental
attitude
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. One should set his mind to achieve the desired goal. It's all about the strategy which is already planning in mind how to play against a particular
player
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.
To conclude
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,
this
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that
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 why some people believe that
strongest
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body
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 is necessary and
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the contrary,
others
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while others
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 and I believe that mental
attitude
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 is everything to achieve success in
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life. The fittest
body
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 without strategy is nothing. A
player
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 should have proper planning to win.
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