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Government should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Agree or disagree?

#government #money #education #recreation #sports
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Some believe that public investment should prioritise academic
life
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extra curricular
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 activities.
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,
government
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 would spend more money on the
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, I completely disagree
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this
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 statement. In my opinion, both are equally important, either because they contribute
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 the improvement of mental and physical
health
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 or with the development of social
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, dedicating time to recreation activities is relevant for
health
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. Regarding mental
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, the frequent practice of exercises reduces cortisol levels in the organism,
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 the individual will have a less stressful
life
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.
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, in terms of
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, it will help to build strength, and strongness, which are core factors to the
health
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 in the long term. In order to provide one example, considering
life
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 expectancy, people do not only want to live more, they want to live better as well. So, learning since the beginning to maintain those habits will provide a more prolonged existence.
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, putting stress on leisure time assists in the development of social
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. Thereby, some needed skills will be fostered,
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sense
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 of collectivity, discipline, leadership, and team spirit.
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, it is known the importance of all these traits when it comes to
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 in
community
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the community
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. Later in the future, these skills will be considered indispensable whether in a company where the person will work or in his community
life
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,
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. If existing in society is an estimated characteristic to the success of
human
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 species, economic investments should be given to it,
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. To summarise, governments must balance their investments between education and recreation. One because it is a strategy to fight against disorders and diseases.
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 due to social reasons since it will improve some social behaviours indispensables to build up a sense of belonging. Those arguments reveal why public investments should prioritise both, education and
extra academic
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 activities.
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