Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience

Internet
is a major revolution in
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modern day
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technology. Buying things online has become one of the most crucial
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of the
internet
. Every year the number of people shopping online has significantly increased. In
this
essay, we will discuss the pros and cons of purchasing online.
To begin
with, the major merit of shopping on websites is, the convenience it provides the customers. The customers can access a virtual shop from any part of the world, search
any
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product within a click of a button and have it delivered wherever required.
This
activity indeed saves a lot of time rather than spending that time finding
products
in a physical supermarket.
Furthermore
, it can accurately show the stock
availibility
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and price in different stores which benefits the buyer
for
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comparing the prices among various stores. Worldwide shipping has
also
boosted the sales for various brands
to
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globally and reach out to a wider area, which was previously untapped.
For Example
, Steelseries, a gaming audio company, widely renowned in Europe but has no outlet in India.
However
, through their website, Indian gamers can now order their
products
online and have
it
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delivered at home.
On the other hand
, despite
of
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the
above mentioned
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advantages, there are some demerits of buying things online. The major disadvantage is the safety concerns which
internet
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the internet

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possess. There has been a steady rise in online scams reported by
the
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buyers. Some accuse the websites
for
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providing incorrect information on the
products
while
,
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others worry if the
products
are really genuine.
Besides
all these issues, hackers are another problem to
the
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society.
Finally
,
internet
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has not been able to be user friendly to all
the
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age groups. Elderly people who are still trying to understand the features of the
internet
, find it confusing to shop online and the fear of online theft has added to their insecurities. Overall, in my opinion, In spite of all the
curse
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online shopping includes, Online shopping greatly benefits various sellers and buyers with time and convenience.
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