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Some people believe that ghosts are real. Some others say they are an illusion. Give your opinion.

#people #ghosts #illusion
Different
people
 have different beliefs about life after
dealth
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death
.So consider that
ghost
 exist and other think that it is a joke.In my
opinion
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ghost
 are to
be consider
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as
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 exist similar to our faith
on
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in
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 gods.
To begin
 with, there are lots of
documentries
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documentaries
 about
existence
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the existence
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 of life after
dealth
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death
.Many
people
 have actually seen
existence
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the existence
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 of
people
 after they leave.
For instance
,a person losing his close friend after an accident has seen the person
everytime
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 in that exact location.
People
 can assume
this
 could be an illusion but
thats
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that's
 not possible at all times.As some
people
dont
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don't
beleive
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believe
 , they have even tried keeping cameras to prove their presence.Another point is, most
people
 believe in
god
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 which no one has seen personally yet they have
the
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faith ,
then
 why should ghosts not be real and unagreed. Though on the
otherhand
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other hand
,
people
 say
this
 as
illusion
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an illusion
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 because they have not seen
ghost
 themselves.Someone who lost their loved ones can only feel that in real. There
has
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 been many movies directed by famous directors based on their real stories.Great directors have great knowledge and
inspite
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in spite
inspire
 of that they do agree to their presence on earth.
For example
,a famous director recently spoke in his interview that he has produced his film based on his real experience of watching his uncle in his farmland
everynight
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every night
. In conclusion,though belief
on
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ghost
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the ghost
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 is
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everyone's
everyones
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everyone's
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 choice but their experience made personally proves their point.
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