Advertising campaigns on TV that are targeted at children should be banned. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Media has been increasingly playing a major role in
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everyone's
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life.Some people think that few advertisements found to be selling for
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children
children's
childrens
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need to be restricted while others consider it hardly matters and impacts any
kids
.
To begin
with, many
companies
these days spend a huge sum of money
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ads
, even more than the investment done for manufacturing their
product
.The many
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behind
this
is the increasing competition among the sellers.
Companies
are trying to make the best use of media , like newspaper,
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pamphlets
, tv
ads
, stalls etc to ensure their
product
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to
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end customers visibility.One
such
product
that has lately gained attention is items more related to
kids
, namely chocolates , toys, cream, powders and food items
such
as power drinks, cereals.The sellers make fantasy
ads
for their products making them real and amuse the
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children
childrens
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and even parents to buy and use the
product
.But in reality
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hardly even 1 % true.
For Example
,
Ads
related to drinks like
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or complain state that they are high in
protien
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protein
and can build ur height to 6 feet.But
thats
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that's
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few of my cousins personally tried and felt
this
a failure even it
didnt
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didn't
help build their immunity. Another example
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is the campaigns on cereals for
kids
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a huge substitute for fruits and vegetables.Many
kids
get falsified with
this
information and upon many years of depending on these foods fail to get physically fit.Not only that they lose their physical strength but
also
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confidence in themselves and eventually lose hope in their life.Though parents at one hand can explain to their
kids
saying these are just for
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which these
companies
try to ,
but
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its really hard for all children to accept it.Even
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if the repeated advertisements that these
companies
make that sometimes even a
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adult fails at one point and accepts to buy and try. In conclusion,advertisements
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related
to products for
kids
needs to be strictly banned which has little truth as its seriously affects the children and in turn the future generation and country growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exploitative
  • impressionability
  • consumerist pressures
  • manipulation
  • materialistic values
  • unhealthy lifestyles
  • critical evaluation
  • educational
  • free-market economy
  • state intervention
  • regulations
  • media literacy
  • omnipresent
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