Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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year
for travel or to work present
the
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enticing opportunity to
a
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students
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students
or it is wasting their time. The analysis contained within the following paragraphs
support
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the
first
notion on
a
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ground of eliciting required skills for professional
life
and refreshing of mind and soul to take up new challenges in
university
. A
year
gap before
university
present abundant opportunity for
students
.
First
students
can
enroll
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into
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specialised courses of interest which not only prepare them for
university
,
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but
also
helps in professional
life
.
Secondly
, adolescents can learn valuable traits of patience, organisation and efficiency by working
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part time
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or full time
that
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ultimately leads to improved productivity in any aspect of
life
.
Lastly
, visiting different parts of the world and witnessing their culture and food habits is one of the many
thing
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that thrive teenager’s soul. Apart from enjoying
sense
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of achievement by travelling to
the
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extreme places
such
as the Sahara desert, it
induce
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traits
such
as independence and ownership of action.
Therefore
, using one
year
as
a
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refreshment before
university
,
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prepares the
students
for coming challenges in
life
. On contrary, some propose that pupils may indulge in
bad
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habit of alcohol or smoking by joining violent gangs and commit the crime in a gap of a
year
before
university
.
Result
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of
this
is compromising the professional and personal
life
.
Moreover
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some student may choose not to study due to the above mentioned bad habits.
However
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by proper education of right and wrong,
these issue
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these issues
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can be resolved. The above-referenced arguments favour the proponents of taking a
year
break for
students
before
university
.
However
contradictory viewpoint of opponents regarding
indulgence
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the indulgence
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of
students
into bad habits can be managed by teaching them what is good or bad.
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