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It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are many applications which are available in mobile phones from which a person can easily read any book according to his taste and it is argued by individuals that electronic gadgets will take the place of
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books
. I agree with
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To begin
 with,there are many reasons behind the popularity of book apps ,
primary
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 one is that
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mostly
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most
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 paper
books
 are expensive and after reading ,these become unuseful. So
people
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 these days prefer to read
books
 from devices, which are
cost effective
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 .To exemplify, in
this
 era, apps like Epudor ,Amazon kindle and many more
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are providing
books
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 very reasonable prices.
Secondary
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 one is that
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 printed
books
 are heavy to carry ,but in the case of electronic
books
 ,a person can take
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advantage , as he is able to read the
books
 whenever and wherever he wants without any tension of carrying
books
.
For instance
 ,a survey was conducted in secondary schools of Madhya Pradesh by teachers and they concluded that around 40% of students started reading
books
 from electronic gadgets while travelling to their schools, but in the
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 they were not able to carry
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another interesting book
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books
 because their bags were already filled with heavy syllabus material.
Hence
, electronic devices are proved as a boon. To conclude , according to my perspective in the future , electronic devices will gain more popularity in comparison with paper
books
 and these will
definately
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definitely
 take the place of
books
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