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Some people say that the studying at school is not important because the most important things are leant outside the school. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been an ongoing debate on the learning method .Some are
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conceived that learning in an academic institution is not significant rather than obtaining knowledge outer side of the campus. I firmly agree with
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 I reinforced my stand. The foremost is that school learner becomes more intelligent.
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, learners could be easily developed their vocational skills through attending various workshops.
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 understanding
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 ancient things and
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 in actual life. While in academic institutes they need to rely on theoretical explanation. Apart from that learners may alleviate stage fear. To explain, when they interact with different people through
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 they could gain better clarity of mind regarding how to interact with unfamiliar personality.
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 in public speaking.
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, they can recognize the moral value in society. By
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 I mean that, due to more interaction with society members especially with elderly people, they may realize
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 of life.
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, they not only impart positive virtues but
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responsible person in society.
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, a few individual claim that gathering theoretical knowledge is extremely vital.
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 with, they could build strong fundamental bases. To elaborate, the academic
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 is the only location where learners could gather
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 aspect of a particular module. To sum up, my claim has been proven correct that learning outside of the school campus is crucial than learn at schools. Which Outside of the schools enhance vocational skills and provide a profound way of practical aspects.
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 communication skills and moral value in their life.
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 into
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 personality.
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, I would voice that “knowledge is not power but
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 of knowledge is power”
Submitted by Mihir Mahant on

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