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Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not always solve the poverty problems. For this reason, rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid.

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The more the
world
 becomes developed, the more the rich and developed
countries
 appear.
On the other hand
, there are still many poor
countries
 around the
world
. For a better
world
, we should solve the poverty problems. In solving these, most of the rich
countries
 only give financial
aid
 to poor
countries
. Even
this
 small
aid
 makes those
countries
 worry for their benefits as they usually don't invest their financial
aid
 if there is no profit for them.
This
's what's going on in the
world
. That's why those
countries
 which need help don't get the appropriate help and are still being poor. As a saying goes, " If there is a will, there is a way", we can find the best answer for them to solve these problems.
First
, we must think about how rich
countries
 become richer and richer. Absolutely, the answer is the ability of technology. It makes them rich as there are many advantages of technology. So, the rich
countries
 should give technological
aid
 rather than financial
aid
 to the poor
countries
. For the rich
countries
,
this
 will be like killing two birds with one stone for getting profits from
this
 investment.
Also
,
this
 is the best way for them both. In conclusion, technology plays the important role in the construction of a better
world
.
This
 may be the best solution to reduce the differences between the rich and the poor
countries
. In my side of view, technological
aid
 is better than financial
aid
 for the
countries
 which are facing poverty problems.
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