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Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not always solve the poverty problems. For this reason, rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid.

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The more the
world
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 becomes developed, the more the rich and developed
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 appear.
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, there are still many poor
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 around the
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. For a better
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, we should solve the poverty problems. In solving these, most of the rich
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 only give financial
aid
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 to poor
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. Even
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 small
aid
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 makes those
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 worry for their benefits as they usually don't invest their financial
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 if there is no profit for them.
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's what's going on in the
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. That's why those
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 which need help don't get the appropriate help and are still being poor. As a saying goes, " If there is a will, there is a way", we can find the best answer for them to solve these problems.
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, we must think about how rich
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 become richer and richer. Absolutely, the answer is the ability of technology. It makes them rich as there are many advantages of technology. So, the rich
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 should give technological
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 rather than financial
aid
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 to the poor
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. For the rich
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,
this
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 will be like killing two birds with one stone for getting profits from
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 investment.
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,
this
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 is the best way for them both. In conclusion, technology plays the important role in the construction of a better
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.
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 may be the best solution to reduce the differences between the rich and the poor
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. In my side of view, technological
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 is better than financial
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 for the
countries
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 which are facing poverty problems.
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