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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 contemporary
world
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, it is irrefutable that each nation has poor folks and has distinct methods of dealing with
poverty
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. Unemployment and illiteracy are two prime reasons for
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.
Education
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 and employment can resolve
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 issue.
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 essay will discuss the aforementioned points in upcoming paragraphs with examples. To commence with, there are a plethora of causes for
world
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poverty
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, but the lack of proper
education
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 and insufficient job
oppotunities
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opportunities
 are main.
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, in many countries, children do not get even primary
education
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 due to
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unavailability
availability
unavailbility
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the unavailbility
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 of schools in multiple remote locations.
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, a survey recently conducted by UNICEF has revealed that 30% of the population of developing nations did not complete their secondary
education
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 in the
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 decade because of
poverty
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.
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, many countries are struggling to produce ample jobs for their citizens.
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, the scarcity of work options and
inability
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the inability
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 to complete secondary
education
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 are key factors for
world
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poverty
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.
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, the government of every nation must ensure to provide
education
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 to every
nationals
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national
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.
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,
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 people in some countries do not want to send their children to schools, the authorities can introduce Mid-day Meal to lure them.
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, post introduction of
Mid-day
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the Mid-day
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 Meal scheme in India in 2010, there was a
suden
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sudden
 increase in the number of students who did the primary and secondary schooling.
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, the governments should create more jobs.
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, the authorities can help in reducing
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unemplyment
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unemployment
 and illiteracy. In conclusion,
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 essay discussed, the illiteracy and unemployment are two main reasons for
world
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poverty
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. The government can help by starting new schemes
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 as Mid-Day Meal to attract more children in schools and generate more job opportunities for their citizens.
Submitted by Chandan Kumar Singh on

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