The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The bar chart provides information about how many tonnes of pineapples were sold to foreign countries by leading exporters in
this
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field in 2009 and 2019,
while
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the pie chart depicts
proportions
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the proportions
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of different types of
costs
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that are included in the pineapple product for the final customer.
Overall
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, in terms of pineapple
exporters
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there was a noticeable switch in 2019 when
Country
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A became a leader and replaced
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B
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. Considering the
costs
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to the consumers, distribution, taxes, and profit margin account for 69% of the price of the final pineapple product. In 2009
Country
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A sold approximately 1 ton of pineapples,
while
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B
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achieved more than four-fold more volume of export than
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B
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. Ten years later
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A rose significantly by ten times and became the major exporter
between
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the three leading countries. At the same time
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C during the ten-year period grew up slightly, and
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B
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witnessed a dramatic fall in 2019 by almost three times. The cost breakdown for the consumer in 2019 is mainly affected by distribution and retail
costs
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,
that
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account for 35%,
while
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taxes and profit margin have comparable figures of 16% and 18%, respectively.
Costs
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on import consist of import licences and international transportation
costs
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are 10% and 12%, respectively,
others
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costs
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cumulatively are less than 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words costs, country, b with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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