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Writing Samples
Band 8

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, *describe the training course you want to do *explain what the company could do to help you *say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request financial assistance and study leave to attend a professional training programme that I believe will greatly benefit both myself and the company. The course, titled Data Analysis, is a six-month programme held in London. It focuses on developing advanced analytical and technical skills, enabling participants to collect, process, and interpret data effectively. Through
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 gain proficiency in key data-processing tools that are essential for improving business performance. I would kindly request the company’s financial support and approval to participate in
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 programme, as it is both intensive and expensive. The total cost of the course is £15,000, which I am currently unable to afford
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 professional development opportunity. Thank you very much for your time and consideration. I look forward to your favourable reply. Yours faithfully, Kunbi

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Say what the company will do to help beyond money, like leave time, how long, who pays for travel, and how your work will be covered.
structure
Make each paragraph focus on one idea; use short, clear lines and simple joins to move from one idea to the next.
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The letter states its aim clearly and asks for help in a polite way.
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It links the course to better work and shows how it will help the firm.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • training program
  • professional development
  • skill enhancement
  • course objectives
  • align with company goals
  • financial assistance
  • time off
  • employee investment
  • career advancement
  • knowledge acquisition
  • performance improvement
  • competitive edge
  • industry standards
  • up-to-date techniques
  • strategic value
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