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Parents should encourage their children to spend less time studying, and more time doing sports/physical activities. Do you agree or disagree

#parents #children #time #sports #activities
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IT HAS BEEN SUGGESTED THAT
INSTEAD
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 OF ALLOCATING MORE
TIME
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 FOR STUDYING, PARENTS SHOULD MOTIVATE THEIR
CHILDREN
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 TO PARTICIPATE MORE IN PHYSICAL EDUCATION
SUCH
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 AS
SPORTS
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 OR OTHER FORMS OF PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES. IN MY OPINION, BOTH ACADEMIC SUBJECTS AND
SPORTS
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 ARE EQUALLY ESSENTIAL FOR THE HOLISTIC DEVELOPMENT OF EVERY
CHILD
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 AND SO ,
THEREFORE
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, AN EQUITABLE
TIME
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 MUST BE DEVOTED TO THESE. THERE ARE SALIENT REASONS WHY
SPORTS
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 SHOULD BE TAKEN INTO CONSIDERATION.
FIRSTLY
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, IT KEEPS
CHILDREN
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'S PHYSIOLOGICAL FUNCTIONING IN GREAT SHAPE.
AS A RESULT
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, THEY BECAME LESS SUSCEPTIBLE TO ILLNESSES RELATED TO
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SEDENTARY LIFESTYLES,
SUCH
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 AS OBESITY AND EARLY ONSET OF DIABETES WHICH COULD IMPEDE A
CHILD
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'S ACADEMIC PERFORMANCE IN THE LONG RUN. PHYSICALLY ACTIVE STUDENTS WERE
ALSO
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 FOUND TO BE MORE ACTIVE AT SCHOOL, WHEREAS THOSE INACTIVE ARE OFTEN OBSERVED LETHARGIC IN CLASS.
ADDITIONALLY
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,
SUCH
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 ACTIVITIES BREAK THE MONOTONY OF MENTALLY DRAINING ACADEMIC SUBJECTS. THESE DIVERSIONS ALLOW THEM TO RECHARGED THEIR BATTERIES IN A FUN WAY. AFTER ALL, ACCORDING TO ERIC ERICKSON, A
CHILD
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 PSYCHOTHERAPIST, EVERY SCHOOL
CHILDREN
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 IS ON THEIR NATURAL STAGE OF PLAYFULNESS AND SO ,
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, THEY MUST BE ACCORDED WITH ENOUGH
TIME
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 TO PLAY RATHER THAN TO STUDY ALL DAY LONG.
ON THE OTHER HAND
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, THE IMPORTANCE OF ACADEMIC SUBJECTS SHOULD NEVER BE UNDERMINED AS ITS FAR-REACHING BOONS, WHEN LEARNED AND COMPLETED, IS NOTABLE. ACADEMIC EDUCATION HERALDS ONE'S JOB PROSPECT. COLLEGE DIPLOMA, OR ITS EQUIVALENT, THESE DAYS IS A PREDOMINANT REQUIREMENT FOR NEARLY EVERY JOB POSTING.
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,
CHILDREN
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 HAS TO BE ACADEMICALLY COMPETENT FOR THEIR FUTURE. IN MY OPINION, AS BOTH FACTORS, EXPLAINED ABOVE, PLAY A PIVOTAL ROLE IN
CHILDREN
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'S LIFE. AN EQUAL
TIME
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 HAS TO BE ALLOCATED FOR THE
ASKIDS
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AS KIDS
 TO ENGAGE IN ACADEMIC AND
SPORTS
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 AS THEY PLAY AN INTERDEPENDENT ROLE IN A
CHILD
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'S OVERALL BEING. AN UNEQUAL
TIME
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 DISTRIBUTION ON EACH COULD HARM
CHILDREN
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'S PROGRESSION IN LIFE. TO RECAPITULATE, WHILE FOR SOME PEOPLE, HAVING STUDENTS PARTICIPATE MORE IN
SPORTS
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 THAN ACADEMIC CLASSES IS CONSIDERED ESSENTIAL, I REITERATE THAT IT IS IMPERATIVE TO ENCOURAGE
CHILDREN
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 TO PARTICIPATE EQUALLY IN BOTH
SPORTS
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 AND ACADEMICS.
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