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Some people think that studying from the past teaches us nothing about today’s life. Others argue that the history is a valued source of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There have been different arguments over the possible impacts of
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modern society.
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 many
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 believe that information from the past has no effect on today's generation, I would argue that it is reasonable to consider
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 as a vital source of knowledge in the progression of
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humanity. On the one hand, it is thought that studying
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 is fruitless as it is merely a set of past events.
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, in the ever-changing world, human activities now happen in an entirely different manner compared to the past.
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, historical data and experiences appear to play no role in
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 or predicting the future.
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, there is no firm evidence for the accuracy of the historical information
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's biased judgments and lack of a data storage system. If some information about the historical events were wrong,
people
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 would have an incorrect understanding of the past society and culture.
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, I would side with those who think that
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 provides
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 with an insight into their surroundings. In fact,
history
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 is an ongoing process in which
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 are approaching a better world. For that reason, valuable knowledge from
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history
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 could enable individuals to be aware of their unlimited
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, resulting in more efforts to be made for the sustainable development of
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human civilization.
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, learning from the past could help
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 to avoid making regretful mistakes.
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, if the US military had thoroughly studied
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Vietnam's
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 of defending against foreign invasions, they would have called off the Vietnam War, which took the lives of millions of innocent
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. In conclusion, to some extent,
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 some arguments arise when gaining knowledge about
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 is likely to bring no value to
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society, it seems to me that its ultimate benefits are significant.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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