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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world's fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

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Of late, limited fossil fuel is one of the most prevalent issues faced by the world as these are used for numerous
purpose
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such
 as powering, fueling vehicles and electricity for industries or houses. There are numerous factors responsible for the same and to eliminate
this
 trouble, various measures can be taken which I will elaborate
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 the subsequent paragraphs. There is
a
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plentiful
reasons
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of
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underlying
this
 muddle and the predominant is
that
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 overuse of petroleum, power and gas for human survival. To substantiate it, using current without no motive like lightning in
day
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 while a person has daylight in his house as there is a dire need to save electricity and using when there is need, unlimited
use
 of petroleum though people can avoid using private transport and they can
use
 public vehicles
thus
 a person can come forward a step to save fossil
fuels
.
As a result
, much
use
 of fossil
fuels
 not only harm the environment but
also
 threat to human lives. As every problem has a solution hidden in the core of its heart the same applies here as well. The need of the hour is to exercise tidal, solar and wind energy.
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, tidal, solar and wind power can be
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 as electricity and wastage of food, vegetables and so on can be
exploitage
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exploited
 as gas
in
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 kitchen purposes.
therefore
, people can save
there
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 atmosphere as well as the need
of
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fuels
. Succinctly, though fossil fuel is
need
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 of the hour yet alternative
are
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 more useful than fossil
fuels
,
however
, a few checks and balances in
this
 regard can
further
 improve the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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