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Some countries have become much richer than others. Richer countries should now help poorer countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I believe that richer
countries
 have the ability to help poorer
countries
, so they should take up the responsibility to support
such
countries
.
Countries
 can come together to solve crises on a global level. Wealthier nations can share their wealth with underdeveloped
countries
 so that they can contribute to the solution. A crisis like Climate change affects every country, rich or poor, equally.
Although
 wealthier
countries
 can develop solutions faster and more efficiently, the crisis will still not be averted if other
countries
 that are still developing continue to exacerbate the climate change with their non-environmental-friendly methods.
For example
, Brazil cleared Amazon Rainforests that act as a crucial carbon sink to make way for more farmlands.
Therefore
, in
this
 case, wealthier nations can provide financial support to poorer ones, so they can build processes that can help us eradicate Climate change on a global scale. Poor
countries
 are going through their internal crisis like hunger, illiteracy and poverty, and these conditions lead to extremism and corrupt leaders that eventually leads to Terrorism.
Such
countries
 act as breeding grounds for Global Terrorism, which can affect the welfare of citizens of more prosperous
countries
 too. Richer
countries
 can provide much-needed financial aid to these
countries
 and help these
countries
 overcome illiteracy, and stopping Terrorism at the stage of formation. No country is thriving in its own sandboxed environment. Crises around the world affect every other country in one way or the other.
Countries
 with the ability to help other
countries
, financial or
otherwise
, should bear the responsibility; only
then
 can
this
 world be sustainable.
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