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People think that countries should produce food that their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
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People
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 assume that nations should less import
food
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 from other nations and they should more rely on producing their domestic
food
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 as much as they can.
Although
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 importing
food
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 from other
countries
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 makes a wider variety of
food
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 for
people
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 of a
country
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, reducing
this
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 importing has some benefits for that
country
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.   Importing
food
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products
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 from other
countries
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 of the world leads to the difference in
food
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. In some
countries
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, because of their climate or geographical situations, it would be impossible to grow up some types of agricultural crops like vegetables or special fruits. If they do not import
food
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products
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 from other
countries
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, the
people
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 of those
countries
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 have a limited variation on their
food
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 basket, whereas, importing
food
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 offers more choices to their
people
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.
For instance
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, in the northern
countries
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, it would not be possible to cultivate many types of fruits or vegetables which they normally grow up in hot or moderate weather.
Thus
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, by importing them the
people
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 of that
countries
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 can access them and consume them.
On the other hand
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, importing fewer
food
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products
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 brings some profits for the internal
economy
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 of a
country
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.
Firstly
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, it can make more job opportunities for
people
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 of that
country
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. It means that more
people
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 can work in farmlands and gardens.
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, more individuals can get hired in other related industries like transporting, packing, or distributing
food
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 and agricultural
products
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.
Therefore
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, the number of jobless
people
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 will be decreased in the
country
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.
Secondly
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, the
food
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 which is produced locally supports the
economy
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 of the
country
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. If the money which is spent with local farmers and growers stays in the
country
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, It can be reinvested with business and services inside the
country
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, so it can enhance the internal
economy
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 of the
country
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. In conclusion, imported
food
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 gives
people
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 more opportunities to choose and enables them to consume different kinds of
food
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.
However
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, importing less
food
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 from other nations and focusing more on producing domestic
food
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products
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 could be beneficial for the internal
economy
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 of
countries
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.
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