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some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this

#people #test #years
The vehicle consumption of the world has increased over the past few
years
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as a
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 an
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 trend could be indicated in
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 of road accidents. Some
suggests
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 that as a strategy, the driving test needs to be repeated
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every five
years
. The essay will
further
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focuses
 on illustrating the
pors
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pros
 and cons of the notion. In Sri Lanka driving license generally needs to be renewed each and every 10
years
 time.
Moreover
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 the renewal
process
 only demands
for
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medical related
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medical-related
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 examinations
such
 as
eye sight
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 and physical fitness for driving. In my opinion, the written examination
also
 should be included as a part of the test,
becuase
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because
 it will naturally force the drivers to be more cautious about the road signs. Simultaneously, if any person is medically unfit to drive, testing could help to early identify the problems. In relation to the heavy vehicles, the testing should be even extended to the physical driving test considering the responsibility
whcih
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which
 the heavy vehicle drivers have. The only concern with regards to bringing down the renewal period of a driver's license could be the
inconvinience
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inconvenience
 a person should
gothrough
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go through
 during the
process
.
A one
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 whole day needs to be
sacrifised
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sacrificed
 to get done a job
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this
 magnitude from a government office.
However
,
this
 concern
also
 could be corrected by implementing a
convienient
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convenient
process
. In conclusion,
license
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 renewal
process
bring
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 down to five
years
 would be a good strategy which could positively
contirbuted
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contributed
contribute
 to the reduction of accidents.
Hence
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 capable
of
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outweigh
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 the disadvantages.
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