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Some people think that men and women have difference qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?21:10/-strong/-heart:>:o:-((:-hĐã nhậnXem trước khi gửiThả Files vào đây để xem lại trước khi gửiTrả lời Some people think that men and women have difference qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Some people believe that
men
 and
women
 all have a difference in qualities, so certain
jobs
 are suitable for
men
 others.
This
 writer completely disagree with
this
 statement because
women
 can do everything that
men
 can do and
women
 more carefully than man In 21 century,
women
 are more strength and the fact thay they can earn money by them self .
Jobs
 that
men
 can do,
women
 can do that too. Because the biggest difference between
men
 and
women
 is sexes, so not any reason for
women
 can’t do any
jobs
.
Moreover
, we have many talented and excellent
women
 like Marie Currie, she had found radium with lots of others invention. She
also
 achieved Nobel award for her dedication. Another reason is almost
women
 are more careful and clever than
men
. With the same
jobs
 they can do better than man like doctor, business or others career. We can see in the world, at many countries
women
 play an important role like Queen Elizabeth II, Queen Victoria, Queen Marie Antonette all of them are
women
 who have big impact on country. Talk about courage,
women
 don’t lose any
men
. In Vietnam war, a lot of girls just only 16-18, they have to go destroy bomb for army can move safety and turning to soldiers, they can fight and dead for their country anytime All in all,
women
 can do everything like man in
jobs
 or other things not depend on qualities. In modern era,
women
 are equal with
men
,
women
 can do any work without
men
.21:05/-strong/-heart:>:o:-((:-h

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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