Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

Eating and drinking habits of
socities
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societies
have been changed, since a few years ago. Nowadays people prefer to
use
more ready to
use
food, than before and fast food has become so popular.
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coulde
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could
not
accepet
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accept
accepted
it as
a healthy food
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healthy food
a portion of healthy food
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, and I am on their side.
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Therefor
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, in
this
essay
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evidence
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believe
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rapid changes in human life, have some obligations
such
as changes in the manner of life. One of these changes is
realted
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related
to lack of time,
consequently
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a large number of people spend more time in their works
instead
of their
foods
.
At
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this
situation
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quick ready meals have become more common. Affordable prices of these junk
foods
with
faboulose
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fabulous
taste, make them
popullar
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popular
,
espicially
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especially
among
yoths
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youths
youth's
.
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to these facts,
adverse
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effects
of
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apply
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them on human
health
are become
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become
have become
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more
prominnat
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prominent
in recent years. In
fact
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fast
foods
such
as KFC, are consist of
alot
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a lot
of salt and fat, which are
make
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them
dangerouse
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dangerous
for
health
. These
componants
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components
might increase some ailments
such
as cardiovascular
diseas
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disease
, Hypertension,
Diabete
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Diabetes
and many more.New investigations illustrate
direct
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the direct
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relation of fast
foods
over usage and
increasing
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increased
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mortality and morbidity. To sum up,
health
issues which are related to
over
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overuse
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use
of ready to eat
meal
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a meal
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, are overweight of their advantages. In my
mind
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the ministry of
health
have
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has
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to encourage people to
use
haelthy
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healthy
foods
instead
of ready to eat or fast
foods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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