Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.
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socities
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societies
use
more ready to use
food, than before and fast food has become so popular. Some body
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could
accepet
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accept
accepted
a healthy food
, and I am on their side. Remove the article
healthy food
a portion of healthy food
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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Some
believe
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believes
such
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to lack of time, Correct your spelling
related
consequently
a large number of people spend more time in their works Add a comma
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instead
of their foods
. At
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In
this
situation
quick ready meals have become more common. Affordable prices of these junk Add a comma
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foods
with faboulose
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fabulous
popullar
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popular
espicially
among Correct your spelling
especially
yoths
.
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youths
youth's
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to these facts, adverse
effects Correct pronoun usage
their adverse
of
them on human Change preposition
apply
health
are become
more Change to the active voice
become
have become
prominnat
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prominent
fact
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foods
such
as KFC, are consist of alot
of salt and fat, which are Correct your spelling
a lot
make
them Change the form of the verb
making
dangerouse
for Correct your spelling
dangerous
health
. These componants
might increase some ailments Correct your spelling
components
such
as cardiovascular diseas
, Hypertension,Correct your spelling
disease
Diabete
and many more.New investigations illustrate Correct your spelling
Diabetes
direct
relation of fast Correct article usage
the direct
foods
over usage and increasing
mortality and morbidity.
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increased
health
issues which are related to over
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overuse
use
of ready to eat meal
, are overweight of their advantages. In my Add an article
a meal
mind
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,mind
health
have
to encourage people to Change the verb form
has
use
haelthy
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healthy
foods
instead
of ready to eat or fast foods
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