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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Although
 it is hard to compete with true
love
, as it is the
first
 and foremost reason to marry someone;
however
, some people may still prefer to take a wise and practical approach and marry someone for money. Getting married is considered
as
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one
 of the most important
milestone
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 in
one
' life as two individuals choose to venture
a
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new phase of their lives together. No
one
 can deny the fact that getting married to a
wealthly
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wealthy
 person who is financially well-settled may sound like a brilliant plan as
one
 may feel comfortable and feel less stressed day to day living.
For instance
, wealthy couples usually plan for excursion trips and exotic vacations multiple times in
an
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 year without thinking about any financial aspects or budget planning
thus
 allowing couples to spend more time together and create a strong bond and eventually raise beautiful children with no financial hardships or long term planning.
Nevertheless
, I personally believe that marrying a person for
love
 has its own convincing reasons.
Firstly
, if couples have already
has
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 built a strong bond of trust and friendship, they will definitely have a better understanding and compassion for each other.
Moreover
, they will be able to support better in
case
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on
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of
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 any financial or emotional hardships. To illustrate, if high-school friends end up getting married together, the couple would have already spent few years of their lives together
therefore
 their bonding and relationship equation will be very mature by the time they get married.
Furthermore
, they will complement each other and make up for small differences amicably without any external intervention. To encapsulate, all relationships require patience,
love
,compassion and respect for each other. Marrying someone for money may not bring happiness and joy in your life until
we
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 find
the
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true
love
 in
our
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 life.
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