Some people think that the goverment is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spend elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?
It is much debated whether
arts
has always seen as a waste of Use synonyms
money
, so it ought to Use synonyms
recieve
less Correct your spelling
receive
money
because society is facing more important issues. I do not fully agree with Use synonyms
this
statement, since I strongly believe that Linking Words
arts
should be supported Use synonyms
as
the same way as other types of activitiesChange preposition
in
,
since they have the same value, Remove the comma
apply
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however
there are more areas that need Add a comma
,however
this
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money
urgently. Use synonyms
Firstly
, Linking Words
this
essay Linking Words
discuss
why Change the verb form
discusses
arts
are important and should Use synonyms
Change the verb form
be helped
helped
by public funding, and Change the form of the verb
help
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secondly
I will explain the reason why Add a comma
,secondly
Correct your spelling
government
goverment
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the goverment
also
should expend the rest of its funds elsewhere.
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First
of all, Linking Words
Use synonyms
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the arts
arts
world should be helped by public funding. For some people it is their career, and for others is a way to escape from the reality Change the noun form
art
or
it is simply their leisure activity, but for both groups is Correct your spelling
of
a
important part of their life, mainly for the Change the article
an
first
one. Because it has always been downplayed, due to that, it is more complicated to grow in Linking Words
this
field. A year ago, BBC did a survey and it came out that more than 60% of people with stress and anxiety, managed to relax thanks to some type of art, Linking Words
such
as dancing, drawing...
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On the other hand
, there are areas which have more importance Linking Words
such
as public health or education, which are Linking Words
ones
of the most essentials. Both of them have a vital function because they are pillars of human rights, and should receive the lion's share of public funding in my opinion, due to everyone has not Correct pronoun usage
one
have
the same financial situation but everyone should have access to it. Recently it has been Change the verb form
had
a
Correct article usage
apply
protests
about USA health because it is not free, the sad and shocking Correct the article-noun agreement
protest
story
woman who passed away Correct your spelling
storey
next
to a hospital in Florida stirred everyone's feelings, she was giving Linking Words
a
birthRemove the article
apply
,
since she has not had the Remove the comma
apply
money
to afford it, the hospital did not attend her.
In conclusion, I agree that Use synonyms
arts
should be supported by public funds, Use synonyms
althought
I believe Correct your spelling
although
goverment
should not increase the amount of Correct your spelling
government
money
spend on it, and Use synonyms
expend
on Correct your spelling
expand
others
areas that are more significant.Correct quantifier usage
other
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