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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely noted that people love to vacation every now and
then
, by visiting places. In my opinion, most of them will be able to travel outside
instead
 of visiting the same corners over mainly due to the changes in the economy.
To begin
 with, abiding by the developing phase of most countries, in the far future, it is more likely that
such
 territories will be capable to hold many tourist attractions.
Moreover
, those beauty spots that have already gained attention will still stand strong as millions of the population have not had a chance to go to
such
 areas yet.
For instance
, regions like New Zealand was only shown in movies in India, where a common thought is that only a celebrity can reach
such
 places.
However
, it was
also
 noted that people from other parts of the world would like to visit India as they had only heard about it.
Thus
, piquing interest to plan a holiday to these countries.
Moreover
, with the current boom in the economy all over the world, in the far future, the ticket and visa rates will be much lesser, which will allow a common man to take his family for vacation with an average salary.
For example
, two decades ago, the flight charges alone to the middle east were charged in lakhs, whereas nowadays, they are in thousands including the visa.
Such
 economical changes will continue, enabling everyone to stay even America and Europe at a meagre price.
Such
 dreams are not far away To conclude, visiting destinations within the country are more preferred nowadays,
however
, international will only remain a dream for a few families since the growth of a country’s financial state will only develop at a tortoise’s pace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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