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Some of the today’s schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be advantage to student’s education, or would it be an unnecessary complication.

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Nowadays, the mode of teaching has shifted from blackboard classes to studying through electronic devices. With the advent of artificial intelligence and advanced
technology
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 the schools have started to provide education through machines. It is an easier and user-friendly way to study and would help the students in various horizons.
To begin
 with, children are taught
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 of things and are expected to be aware of everything as per their syllabus. To fulfil
this
, they should have access to distinct sources of information so that they can completely understand a subject. For
this
, having a
laptop
 is necessary.
For instance
, through Wikipedia, a child can get information about all the things related to their assignments.
Moreover
, due to the pandemic, Coronavirus, the institutions initiated with virtual classes as
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 gathering of kids is not possible.
As a result
 of which, it is important to have a
laptop
.
On the contrary
, at
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 some of the youth are not financially stable
therefore
, they cannot afford the expensive devices to learn.
In addition
 to that, a stable internet connection is not available everywhere. To exemplify, in
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developing and underdeveloped countries internet cannot be found in every nook and corner.
Hence
, training through a
laptop
 has its own disadvantages. In my opinion, having a
laptop
 is far more beneficial for an adolescent than not having one. It helps in better growth and up to date knowledge of a youngster. To conclude, the government of each nation should promote teaching through
laptop
 and provide assistance in obtaining a
laptop
.
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