Some children have to live at different places during their childhood because of transferrable jobs of their parents. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in different places in childhood and give your opinion on whether it is good or bad to stay at different areas for children.

In the contemporary era, parents have to move from
one
place to another because of their transferable jobs, meanwhile
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have to change their
school
places
. There are plenty of
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and demerits of changing
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after
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. Here I will shed light on it
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my own opinion. To commence with, there are numerous pros of
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school
after
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. First and foremost, it enriches their knowledge about different
places
for instance
last
month a survey was conducted at
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level, in which people saw
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result of those
children
who change their
places
have vast experience about different
places
as compared to those who stabled at
one
city for
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time
. So living
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different
places
is lucrative for youngers.
Apart from
this
,
while
changing
school
also
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the confidence of
children
,
this
is because they get
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to meet
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of new individuals and acquaint
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them. In conclusion
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they do not feel fear to talk any stranger because it become their habit to face new masses
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daily
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.
On the other hand
, every coin has two sides, so it has
also
some
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negative
effects on
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to shift from
one
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firstly
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job
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in the mid of offsprings classes that
time
they have to suffer from their
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,
this
is because every mentor
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different ways of teaching, which
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the study of youngers because
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time
they do not understand the way of teaching of new teachers. Hammering the
last
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according to
my point of view live
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different
places
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many new things in
children
and
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chance to explore their knowledge,
whereas
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at
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one
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monotous
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monotonous
sometime.
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