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Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to the action of celebrities. Some people opine that they get the excessive salary despite they have negative
impacts
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 on
society
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, while others insist that their payments are
fair
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a fair
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 amount since they improve
society
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. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss both sides of the arguments and examine the reasons why I believe celebrities have positive
impacts
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 on
society
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.
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 with, people believe that famous figures should be paid less for two reasons.
Firstly
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, they get
the
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an
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 enormous amount of
money
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.
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, Kylie Jenner was recognized as the youngest billionaire by Forbes when she was 21 years old, despite her success owes a lot to her family. In fact, her parents and sisters are
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 famous and earn tons of
money
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.
Secondly
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, they surely have negative
impacts
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 on
society
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, since they are often arrested due to possession of illegal drugs and some violent activities.
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, a certain proportion of people claim that entertainers are paid appropriate salaries and they have positive
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, famous actors tend to use their fortune for charity. Leonardo DiCaprio, the famous actor, donated his
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 to prevent environmental change and established his own foundation. On top of that, celebrities are often assigned a good-well ambassador who
reach
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reaches
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 social problems to
public
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the public
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.
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, the famous actress, Emma Watson, was appointed
to
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as
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 the spokesperson of the project called He for She which was run by the UN Women. To conclude, I believe both of the arguments have merits.
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, I think entertainers have positive
impacts
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 on
society
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 is because they use their
money
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 for good things, and they can announce important issues to the world.
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