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Around the world more and more people today are living in urban areas. Why is this? What are the solutions?

Nowadays, migration from the countryside to
city
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 spaces is a common phenomenon. An increasing
number
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 of villagers have been moving and residing in
town
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the town
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center
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centre
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 in every corner of the earth. The essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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for
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 augmenting the
number
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 of
city
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 dwellers, including
availability
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the availability
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 of
amenities
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 and employment opportunity.
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,
this
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 essay will provide the probable solutions of the issues,
such
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 as decentralizing of office as well as industries and development of
facilities
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 in semi-urban and village
areas
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.
To begin
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 with, since the
city
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centers
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centres
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 have all modern
amenities
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 and
facilities
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 to live a comfortable and
cozy
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cosy
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 life, people tend to reside in an urban area.
Secondly
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, most of the administrative offices and large industries situated in town
areas
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, which is why citizens of cities get more employment opportunities.
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, the secretariats of the government of Bangladesh are established in the major
city
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Dhaka
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of Dhaka
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.
Consequently
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of government employees are living in Dhaka
City
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.
Thus
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, people are fond of living in town due to the existence of required
facilities
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 and more chances of having jobs.
On the other hand
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, decentralization of offices and industries may be an effective way to minimize the population in
metropolis
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a metropolis
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. As individuals are mostly shifting to urban
areas
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 for grabbing work chances, decentralization of workplaces and creation of employment opportunities
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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outside of metropolitan may help to reduce the
number
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 of
city
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 dwellers.
For example
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, if the secretariats of Bangladesh were shifted
in
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to
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 rural
areas
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, a considerable
number
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 of government staffs would
also
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 transfer from
the
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apply
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Dhaka
city
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.
Moreover
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,
development
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the development
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 and construction of
facilities
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 and
amenities
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 in the rural
areas
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 may
also
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 encourage citizens to leave complex and stressful
city
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 life. In conclusion, accessibility of modern
amenities
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 and more job opportunities in
metropolis
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the metropolis
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 are the main causes of amplifying trend of urban inhabitants.
However
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,
transfer
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the transfer
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 of workplaces and
foundation
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the foundation
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 of
facilities
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 in villages may help to solve the problems.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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