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Many parents prefer to teach children themselves instead of teaching . Why is this reason ? Is it good or bad ?

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In many ,countries it is argued that if
parents
 teach to their
children
 , it would be more profitable.
This
 idea is thought of as a demerit . In the following essay ,the reason for
this
 opinion and seeming it as a negative point will be discussed . The power full reason for intending
parents
 to teach their
children
instead
 of teachers would be the fact that expenses in school have increased . ,
Apparently
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 modernization in schools has been attended by societies that parent have to pay more fee for their student
education
 .
For instance
 , some new technological devices intelligent electronic books and notebook are used in the educational environment that needs to spend much money to purchase them.
Moreover
 , it would be hard for mothers and fathers .
Therefore
 ,
parents
 can not send their
children
 to school unless they pay considerable money for their
students
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student's
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education
 . So , they prefer
children
 are lessened by
parents
. Preventing
students
 to have a more desirable
education
 would be the case of having a negative view about training to
children
 by their parent .
Furthermore
 , teachers in teaching are more professional than mothers and fathers because they have many experiences in
variety
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 of subjects and
have
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 relate certifications.
For example
 ,
parents
 will not be able to lesson mathematics to
students
 because it needs a teacher who knows and understands it completely.
Thus
 , if
children
 are not taught by a helpful and proper trainer , they will not have development and improvement in their educations. In conclusion , despite the fact that if parent
teach
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 the
students
 , it will be cheaper , it is not reasonable and beneficial for
children
education
 quality . Because many of subjects can not be learned to
children
 as well as a professional teacher . The more teacher teaches student,the more desirable
education
 will be created.
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