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It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn’t worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to architectures. Some
people
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 insist that land developers should pay more attention to
purposes
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 of each building than its
appearance
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. I strongly agree with
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 opinion because the
first
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 priority of buildings is to protect one’s life, and
people
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 do not
care
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 about
its
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appearance
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.
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 reason why I believe architects should pay more
attentions
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attention
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 to purposes is that building may endanger one’s life. Usually,
people
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 spend
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almost
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 of their time inside buildings
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 as schools, offices and houses. And severe accidents may happen
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 of
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 building. Countries
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 as Japan especially
care
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 about
function
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the function
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 of
building
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the building
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, since Japan has many earthquakes and the houses are required to be bear with the earthquakes.
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, another reason why I supporting
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 idea is that
people
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 usually do not
care
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 about
appearance
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. In general, the most important factor of
building
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the building
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 is what can they do inside the building. Take a shopping mall,
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,
people
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care
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 about what kind of stores are in the mall, and they do not
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 about how the building looks like. The only exception is architectures in traditional tourist destinations.
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, convenience stores and
fast food
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 chain stores in Kyoto, where is famous for the old Japanese landscape, are ordered to change their
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colour
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 of logo marks and the exterior into quiet
colors
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 including brown for the sake of maintaining the landscape. To conclude, I reiterate my complete agreement with
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 is because serving
purpose
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a purpose
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 is important for protecting one’s life, and
people
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 hardly
care
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 about
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appearance
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the appearance
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 of buildings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • functionality
  • prioritize
  • building design
  • meet the needs
  • occupants
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • landmarks
  • symbolize
  • balance
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