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Nowadays, the number of obese children is increasing at an alarming rate. What are some of the causes of this increase and how can the problem be solved?

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According to many experts, obesity is one of the most prevalent problems of the decade. Much as
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 ailment affects both elderly and young people, it’s undoubtedly true that
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 are under treatment the most. Many
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 are suffering obesity related-problems owing to a sedentary lifestyle as well as detrimental eating habits and
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 situation diminishes their
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 substantially.
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 a healthier eating habit and doing more physical exercises may prevent the possible consequences of the problem to a certain extent. The more
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 allocate their time in front of the desk to play video games or study their lessons, the more their lifestyle is gradually becoming mundane and tranquil. The lack of exercise certainly strengthens the impulse of eating more and
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 leads them to gain weight limitlessly.
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, consuming fast
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 perpetually and getting rid of nourishing healthier meals
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 as vegetables or fruits due to the fact of admitting they are tasteless definitely pave the way for becoming overweight. At
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 point, governments have to take measures to prevent obesity by enacting new laws and tax regulations on fast
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 chains and supporting healthier
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 companies with tax-free regulations.
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 activities and courses in schools can be another solution to the problem. Taking everything into account, with governments’ support, it’s in our hands to prevent
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 from sedentary lifestyles and eating fast
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 habits so as not to gain more weights.
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