It is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that Governments should put an emphasis on helping their own citizens because of the inability to help all the
world
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population
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. While I admit that there are some drawbacks, I mostly agree with
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of all, it is true that not all
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have the power to supply the needs of their
population
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.
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, aids from the rest of the
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can play a significant role in developing poorer
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.
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, the financial aids that
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have been sending to Africa for more than 40 years increased the life expectancy, overall wealth, education level, and
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played an important role in fighting serious disasters, reducing hunger in those
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, if all
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focus on their national issues and try to solve them properly, there would be no problem at all. It is the citizens’ money which governments use to help other
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, so
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of helping them, the money should be allocated among the ones who own it. Another reason is that sometimes government officials make some aids around the
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which are actually in need for its own
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, in Turkey, the government decided to send more than 1 million vaccines to poor
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,
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result the vaccination process in Turkey delayed thereby affecting everybody because of the restrictions In conclusion, I would like to tell that even though there are some people around the
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who needs help, I believe governments should prioritize assisting their own
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instead
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of others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resources
  • moral obligation
  • global stability
  • economic impact
  • domestic issues
  • international aid
  • diplomatic relationships
  • resource allocation
  • healthcare
  • education
  • infrastructure
  • national priorities
  • desperate need
  • indirect benefit
  • goodwill
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