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Some people believe that it is the government's responsibility to provide care and financial to support people after they retire. Others, however, think that individuals themselves saving money in their own care when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to the
government
 expenditure for seniors. Some
people
 insist that the responsibility of taking care of retired
people
 owed by the
government
, while others opine that the
responsbility
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responsibility
 owned by citizens. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and examine the reason why I believe citizens should prepare
money
 after they retire.
To begin
 with, there are two primary reasons why
people
 support the former idea.
Firstly
,
people
 aged over 65, in general, are unable to continue their job.
However
,
people
 aged over 65 are still spry and able to continue to work. Despite their lives are continue after they retire jobs,
this
 is decided by
a
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Japanese law. If the
government
 forces the old generation to retire, they have better support in terms of
money
.
Furthermore
, the Japanese
government
 reported that it takes around 200 million yen after
people
reiter
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 occupations.
However
, it is almost impossible for the ordinary Japanese to prepare
this
 huge amount of
money
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe individuals should save
money
 for the life after retirement. In fact, the ageing of
Japan
's population is advancing significantly, and it has become nearly impossible to manage the current social welfare system in
Japan
. Take a pension,
for example
, only two working generations support one retiree in 2020, while around 12 youngsters supported one senior in 1950.
In addition
 to
this
, the medical fee for the senior generation in
Japan
 has tripled for
last
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 50 years.
Thus
, the
government
 have better cut costs for retirees and they need to prepare the living expenses for the life after retirement. To conclude, I believe both sides of the arguments have merits.
However
, I assume that
people
 should save
money
 for old age.
This
 is because the ageing society in
Japan
 has
advancing
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, and social welfares
such
 as pension are likely to disappear.
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