•The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. • Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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participation at fun locals and entrance value to those venues in 2009.
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cinema
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Theme Parks are as expensive as football matches (regardless of team) Change the article
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cricket matches have a lower cost but always
higher than the cinema.
Prices for families are convenient because by making a quick calculation you can save on the total price so that it is not an excessive cost for four people.
We find greater savings for a family in theme parks than in football, basketball or cricket matches but Add a missing verb
are always
also
with respect to cinema
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the cinema
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