Some people say advertising has positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because it will make people dissatisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, most of the
product
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products
being
advertised by companies. Add a missing verb
are being
This
will be effected positive merits economic as well as
negative merits social. Moreover
, advertisements
are vitally important in the country. I will be explained
both views below the paragraphs.
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explain
To begin
with, all of the companies were shown their positives
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positive
characterizes
of the product, Replace the word
characteristics
such
as good for health, fresh drink, healthy food, etc. For example
, a lot of products
were advertised by channels (Animal planet
, Capitalize word
Planet
man
vs Capitalize word
Man
wild
, starspots, etc.) in the programs or Capitalize word
Wild
movies
breaks that will cover the children’s and Change the noun form
movie
youngers’
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youngsters’
aspiration
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aspirations
while
they do not know the negatives
effects. Change the noun form
negative
In addition
, a lot of new product
will be introduced by using Fix the agreement mistake
products
advertisement
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advertisements
via
television or posters that will be updated by the Change preposition
on
people
. Besides
, several online products
were introduced via a phone app that will be aided
the Wrong verb form
aid
people
. For instance
, online purchases are very easy and safe.
On the other hand
, some of the products
were
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apply
effected
Correct your spelling
affected
people
lifestyles. Change noun form
people's
For example
, noodles are not healthy food. But, some people
made
their foods as noodles for entire days because it will easy to prepare. Wrong verb form
make
Also
, some of the younger ones adopted the advertisements
. For instance
, any of the new products
were telecasted by the companies that products
were liked by younger ones.
To sum up
, advertisements
were
updated Verb problem
have
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people's
people
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people's
life
in order to improve their quality of Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Replace the word
life
lifestyles
, and to develop positive economic effects. In my opinion, Replace the word
life
advertisements
are essentially important as well as
that
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they
depicts
the side effects of the Correct subject-verb agreement
depict
products
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