Some people say advertising has positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because it will make people dissatisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, most of the
product
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products
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being
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advertised by companies.
This
will be effected positive merits economic
as well as
negative merits social.
Moreover
,
advertisements
are vitally important in the country. I will
be explained
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both views below the paragraphs.
To begin
with, all of the companies were shown their
positives
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positive
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characterizes
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characteristics
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of the product,
such
as good for health, fresh drink, healthy food, etc.
For example
, a lot of
products
were advertised by channels (Animal
planet
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,
man
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vs
wild
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, starspots, etc.) in the programs or
movies
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breaks that will cover the children’s and
youngers’
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aspiration
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aspirations
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while
they do not know the
negatives
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effects.
In addition
, a lot of new
product
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products
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will be introduced by using
advertisement
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advertisements
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via
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television or posters that will be updated by the
people
.
Besides
, several online
products
were introduced via a phone app that will
be aided
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the
people
.
For instance
, online purchases are very easy and safe.
On the other hand
, some of the
products
were
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effected
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affected
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people
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people's
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lifestyles.
For example
, noodles are not healthy food. But, some
people
made
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their foods as noodles for entire days because it will easy to prepare.
Also
, some of the younger ones adopted the
advertisements
.
For instance
, any of the new
products
were telecasted by the companies that
products
were liked by younger ones.
To sum up
,
advertisements
were
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updated
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people's
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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in order to improve their quality of
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life
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lifestyles
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life
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, and to develop positive economic effects. In my opinion,
advertisements
are essentially important
as well as
that
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they
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depicts
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depict
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the side effects of the
products
.
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