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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people

#museums #charge #admission #people
For admission is charged by many
art
 galleries.In my opinion,
i
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 think
this
 has way more drawback like extinct of
museum
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 and displays
comparision
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comparison
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 between disadvantaged and affluents than its merits.
To begin
 with, museums collect entry fee which resembles the sign of wipe-out of these
art
 collection centres in the near future. The main reason for
this
 is,most
of
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the
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young people tend to visit these
art
 galleries for fun particularly when there is no admission fee.
For example
,
Travancore
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the Travancore
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 museum is one of the popular
museum
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museums
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 in the state
to
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kerala
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,it is filled with youth as
this
 gallery does not have any ticket fee.
Although
, some people consider by stopping
this
 free entry, can make fund for the
developement
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development
 of these centres.
This
 will
also
 showcase the
comparision
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comparison
 between disadvantaged and affluents.
Thus
, it is generally,found that
this
 might lead to the
extinct
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 of all centres.
On the other hand
, it is argued that
this
 has multiple benefits.
Firstly
,
this
 funding would be an
assest
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asset
.
This
 is because these charges which are collected from
public
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 can be used for the increase in the number of collections of
art
 in these galleries.
For instance
,a significant number of youth are
focussed
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 on the latest collections.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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