In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as hobby. To what extent do you think it is positive trend.

In previous years getting articles on the store was considered a domestic task
however
nowadays a lot of people view them as a hobby. In
this
,article I will give my opinion about the extent to which
this
is a positive trend.
First
of all, since several years ago most of the
stores
are located in big buildings called malls, these places have not only
stores
but
also
entertainment like cinemas,
moreover
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you can
also
get all kinds of food from fast food to fancy restaurants making going to buy an
experience
suitable not only for families but
also
young people,
this
has made them the to-go place in most countries.
In addition
, utilities and banks
also
have branches in these places, meaning that you can pay all of your bills and check your bank status in one place. By making these destination places where you can do anything from buying clothes, electronics to paying the electricity bill the shopping
experience
has been transformed, in the past,
for example
, clothing
stores
were far way one from another making the
experience
tedious
however
by going to a big mall you have several
stores
just a few feets from one another. In conclusion, even though shopping started as something you did by necessity it has by the creation of malls transformed in an enjoyable
experience
. Just imagine yourself buying a computer in the same place you can grab a burger or check your bank status, is understandable that people would consider
this
a hobby.
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