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Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A small group of
people
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 thinks that pastime
activities
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 should be hard to entertain. In my opinion, the happiness we get by performing leisure
activity
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 cannot be measured in terms of easy
activity
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 and hard
activity
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.
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 essay totally disagrees with the above-mentioned statement because a handful of persons has a habit of watching more movies which is not a tough job to do. On
one
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 hand, some
people
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 will enjoy easy
activities
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.
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,
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such
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activity
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 for most
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 to have fun is swimming.
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activity
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 requires very less equipment and can be learned easily. I remember learning to swim in my local community when I was a child, and it never felt like a demanding or challenging experience.
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 more
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that is
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 very easy is photography. We don't need to have much technical experience of operating a camera to take a photo. The main quality of the person who takes a photo is just to prejudge the output of the photo. A recent study, made by Geetam University says that the percentage of
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 who choose easy
activities
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 as their
hobbies
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 are more than the number of
people
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 who choose hard leisure
activities
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.
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, there is a certain section of
people
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 who thinks that the leisure
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 they choose should be so hard to have high satisfaction. In ,addition they need to spend a lot of time achieving their excellence.
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 of my friends spent 3 years of time learning sky diving and it is too risky to perform those
activities
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. He said that after diving from 4000m above sea level he was very happy about his performance and his confidence level has been increased.
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 type of performance will give us great pleasure. In conclusion, simple
hobbies
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 are fun and relaxing but difficult
hobbies
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 are equally pleasurable and give extreme happiness.
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, choosing
hobbies
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 will purely depend on ones own tastes and thoughts where the output of happiness is not measurable based on the
activity
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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