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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?

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Some
people
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 reckon that by escalating the
prices
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 of fuel we can mitigate the environmental hazards.
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, from my perspective, raising the price of combustible is not the sole way to tackle
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 issue ,
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, there are some other ways too .
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, it is undeniable that the influence of fuel is unremarkable. Whereas ,the fuel is not the only aspect that the
people
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 consider about buying a car because the price of
cars
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 as well as it depends on their need.
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: In India , the
prices
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 of petrol are double as compared to 10 years later, but the number of
cars
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 and motorbikes are immensely increasing day by day.
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 with, the government can impose stringent rules to buy
a
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a car
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cars
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 like increasing tax on imported
cars
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 as well as raising their
prices
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 because these are an integral part of
traffic
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 congestion as well as the emission of fuels.Because of
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 fact ,
people
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 should consider if the price of the car is too high to afford and it will decrease the
traffic
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 jams .
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, the
people
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 would like to take public transport ,
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 it will cut down the number of private vehicles as well as reduce the emission of carbon dioxide which causes the greenhouse effect and climate changes these days. In conclusion, reducing the
prices
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 of petrol is not the only way to decrease the
traffic
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 and pollution. As I concerned, we should apply the above-mentioned solution to comply with the
traffic
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 and environmental issues

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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