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Nowadays tourism has shown a great impact on society. Do you agree or disagree.

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In the contemporary era, there is an argument over an issue that tourist has rocketed day by day and it has a pivotal role on society as comparedtotheothersectors. .
This
 essay will discuss why touristry shows a superior impact on the community better than other before coming to a reasoned
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conclusion
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To begin
 with, since the trend of tourism has
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, individuals show an inclination towards it and it paves the way to increase the
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 status of any country.
In other words
, if Travellers visited distinct nations, it will play a tremendous role for a country. Visitors allocate their income on different commodities like purchasing local items , staying
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 restaurants , entertainment and so on.
For example
, the headline in 'Moscow Time ' revealed that in Japan Gdp is totally based on sightseers .
Hence
 , we can say that in
this
 way it has an indispensable role
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 the community.
Furthermore
, the employment rate of any nation expands . To elaborate it, In the modern world passengers have attracted to spend on their holidays on attractive destinations , in order to entertain themselves after the hectic lifestyle. More and more tourists go to relish themselves in Bars , Casinos and Hotels. Due to
this
 job opportunities rises. Masses will never be employed unless there were tourers who travelled to myriad places .
For instance
, In , German citizens render the work only because of sightseers visit to them .
Thus
 , these all are the benefits of
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 industry. To conclude, I mu opinion, that tourism increases job opportunities for folks as well as
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 of the income for society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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